Saint Jimmy

Hi
wollte mal eure meinung zu dem Text von mir hören ^^ Aber ehrlich sein ^^

The Crows

Fallin' rain high up in the northern sky
Can't you hear the crows? They cry!
Do they feel the same like me
Do they feel like they're in a cage?
(Who knows!)

(CH)
The crows fly high above me
They cry out all their sorrows
Can't you hear their voices?
They're still flying and they'll keep on

(Look at me)
Can't you see the cage I'm in?
(Do I suffer from my sin)
The doors are open but why can't I get out?
What's the reason to be in?
Noone's there to give me an answer
Can't even the crows give me one?

(BR)
I wanna fly, wanna be free
Why can't the others accept me
The way I wanna be?
Maybe one day they will
Maybe one day my time comes to be free
Sometimes I feel the cros are the only one
Who like me the way I am!


Hoffe ihr hattet spaß beim lesen xDDD naja bis denne

Eure Saint Jimmy

Hannah

Hallo heiliger Jimmy,

Mmmh, also am Inhalt des Textes habe ich ablolut nichts zu mäkeln. Der ist wunderbar duster.

Hier und da holpert der Text jedoch noch ein bißchen, könnte eventuell die Stimmung kaputtmachen....

Zum Beispiel hier:

Do they feel the same like me
Do they feel like they're in a cage?

Und hier:

Can't you hear their voices?
They're still flying and they'll keep on

I wanna fly, wanna be free
Why can't the others accept me

Du durchbrichst absichtlich den Rhythmus, was ein guter Kniff sein kann. An den oben genannten Stellen haut das jedoch raus.

liebe Grüße

Hannah

Saint Jimmy

Hi ^^ ja ich weiß das das da anders is weil da is ja refrain und bridge ^^ da kommt auch ne andere melodie :P ^^ naja wenn der inhalt schon mal ok is dann is ja gut ^^